中考英语满分作文解析：山东卷
2019年
文段表达
Write a review（评论） of the following story in about 120 words． The review has to include the following points．（阅读下面的故事，请根据下面的提示，写出一篇约120词的评论）．
（1）The title of your review．（你撰写的评论的标题．）
（2）Your idea（s）， examples and the reason（s） for unhappiness and happiness in the story．（你归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点，举例子并说明原因．）
（3）Your idea（s） of happiness， examples for happiness in your daily life．（归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点，并举例说明．）
（4）Your conclusion about happiness．（关于幸福的结论．）
（5）The words you may use．（你可能用到的词） be satisfied with（对……满意） desire n．欲望 contentment 知足 the key（关键） to happiness．
A long time ago， in a rich and beautiful country， there lived an unhappy king． He slept badly and didn't feel like eating． He often cried for no reason． This made the queen and his people worried． So they called a doctor to examine him．But he found nothing wrong with his body．He said what the king needed was the shirt of a happy person to wear．That would make him happy．
The prime minister was called to the palace． But when they explained the king's situation to him， he said，\I have a lot of power， it doesn't make me happy． I'm always worried about losing my power．\
Then the king's banker came to say， I'm afraid I'm not happy either． I have a lot of wealth， but I'm always worried about losing money． Someone tries to steal my money． Next， the palace singer was called to say， \famous but I'm not happy because I'm worried about being followed by others． I can't be free．\
Finally， the top general was told to go out to find a happy man． He searched and searched but couldn't find anyone． Everyone seemed to have their own problems， and no one was truly
happy． Just as he wanted to give up． he saw a poor man on the street． He was eating with his hands and singing happily to himself． The general went to him and said，\makes you so happy？ You have no power， money， or fame．\The man said，\have everything I want． and I don't want what I can't have． So I'm happy， and my song comes from the happiness in my heart． \give your shirt to me， I need it， \．\？ I don' t have any shirts．\．
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2019年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求根据题目中的小故事写一篇评论，话题涉及现代人们对幸福的理解，体现了关注学生的成长，教育学生树立正确的价值观，符合社会主义价值观的要求，属于当今社会的热点话题之一。本文要求根据小故事写出评论，要求学生能够发表自己的观点，难度要求较高。学生在写作时要阅读所给材料。
My Thoughts about Happiness
Power, wealth, and fame can't always make people happy. For example, the rich people were unhappy, because they are afraid of losing money, while the poor people was truly happy because he was satisfied with what he could have.
What can always make me happy？Happiness is always in my heart and is easy to find if I pay more attention to what I have. For instance, enjoying the beautiful sunshine after a cloudy day, getting a glass of water from mother when I am studying, getting help from my friends when
I am in trouble and so on. These are the moments when I am happy.
All in all, don't think about what you can't have. Contentment is the key to happiness. 【名师点评】
这是一篇要求写评论的文章，根据下面的故事中的相关信息写出一篇约120词的评论。所提供的材料中列举了撰写的评论的标题。主要从：（1）归纳的关于故事中幸福和不幸福的观点，举例子并说明原因。（2）归纳你在日常生活中关于幸福的观点，并举例说明；（3）关于幸福的结论。这几个方面去介绍。时态为一般过去时，人称为第一人称。注意评论中必须包含材料上的故事情节，并适当发挥。写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语，尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。 【写作亮点】
这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，紧扣主题，根据事实写出自己感受．灵活运用平时学习的句子和句型，写出了自己对幸福的理解。短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，结构清晰，符合题目要求。其次本文运用了一些亮点句型，为文章提分不少。（1）高分句型一 For example，the rich people were unhappy, because they are afraid of losing money, while the poor people was truly happy because he was satisfied with what he could have.例如，富人不快乐，因为他们害怕失去钱，而穷人真正快乐是因为他对自己所拥有的感到满足。句子because they are afraid of losing money是由because引导的原因状语从句。
（2）高分句型二 All in all, don’t think about what you can't have. 总之，不要想你不能拥有的东西。句子what you can't have.作think about的宾语。
2018年
Use the following information to write a paragraph about bees.
●Be as busy learning all their subjects as bees are busy gathering honey
●They have sharp stings(刺) to harm them and protect themselves.
●Wise and busy ●No gains
●Does its own work
●Driven from the hive to be stopped from eating the honey before winter comes ●Join together to build cells of wax（蜡质房子） for their honey ●How busy they are always ●Don't work
●That have six sides and are all of one shape and size ●A house called a hive ●One queen
Bees live in… They are… There is… in each hive. They all… Each bee… They build cells… It’s pleasant to see… But drones… They are… Children shouldn’t touch bees… No pains… Shouldn’t children…
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2018年山东枣庄中考英语作文要求学生介绍蜜蜂。文体为说明文。今年作文的主题从以往的关注人文转至关注自然，属于一个全新的视角，但本文已给出大量材料，学生只需认真阅读所给材料，有条理地去组织自己的语言。本文难度较低。介绍蜜蜂时应注意语言表达清楚。
Bees live in a house called a hive. They are wise and busy. There is one queen in each hive. They all join together to build cells of wax(蜡质房子) for their honey. Each bee does its own work. They build cells that have six sides and are all of one shape and size. It's pleasant to see how busy they are always, But drones don't work. They are driven from the hive to be stopped from eating the honey before winter comes. Children shouldn't touch bees because they have sharp stings(刺) to harm them and protect themselves. No pains, no gains. Shouldn't children be as busy learning all their subjects as bees are busy gathering honey? 【名师点评】
2018年山东枣庄中考作文为材料作文，本文主要描述蜜蜂的相关情况，是一篇说明文。题目中已经给出了大量的信息，考生只需挑选其中的一些，然后有机地组合起来即可。在写作时要注意不要完全按照题目给出信息的顺序进行描写，要按照正常介绍事物的顺序来写作，比如先介绍属性，然后是外表，接着是生活习性等。本文描述客观事实，所以多使用一般现在时。注意叙述有条理，多用关联词，使行文连贯、通顺。这篇作文的词数为80-100，不得出现考生和相关人物的真实校名和姓名。 【写作亮点】
这是一篇优秀的作文。本文能根据题目中材料，语言简洁准确，行文连贯，不遗漏要点。本文体裁为说明文。分为三段式来介绍蜂巢。在文章的开头：引出介绍的事物，蜜蜂是益虫(a kind of beneficial insects)。第二段为文章的重点，具体描写了蜜蜂的情况。1.聪明、勤劳的动物(wise and busy)；2.做事井井有条(in good order and well arranged)；3.建造蜂巢(build cells of wax)；结尾：联系实际
要向蜜蜂学习，一分耕耘一分收获(no pains, no gains)。文章语言表达要符合英语习惯，准确运用
一般现在时。
2017年
文段表达
Write a review of the following story in about 90 words. The review has to include the following points:
1. The name of your review. 2. The idea(s) of your review. 3. The reason(s) for your idea(s).
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