【英语】九年级下册英语书面表达解析版汇编及解析

【英语】九年级下册英语书面表达解析版汇编及解析

一、英语书面表达

1．假定你是David，来自美国，你的QQ好友Li Ming想要在今年的暑假去做志愿者，他来信向你了解有关这方面的情况。请认真阅读下面的邮件，并根据信中的内容和实际用英语回复，可以有适当的发挥。 To: davidwoodlandschool@qq.com From: limingsunshineschool@qq.com Subject: Volunteering Dear David， I’m writing to ask you for advice. I know you often do volunteer work in your free time. I’m interested in it very much. I’m going to do some this summer vacation. But I know little about it. Could you help me answer the following questions? ●Why do you want to be a volunteer? ●What kind of vo1unteer work is suitable for us students? ●Do you have any problems with volunteering? ●If my parents don’t allow me to do so, what should I do? I’m looking forward to hearing from you soon. Best wishes， Li Ming 注意：1.词数90左右。回复信的开头和结尾己经写好，不计入总词数; 2.回复中不得提及真实的人名、校名等相关信息。 Dear Li Ming,

Thanks for your letter. I'm glad you would like to be a volunteer. Now let me answer your questions.

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I hope you love volunteering and do well in it. Looking forward to your good news.

Best wishes

David

【答案】Dear Li Ming,

Thanks for your letter. I'm glad you would like to be a volunteer. Now let me answer your questions.

I volunteer because I enjoy helping others and can learn a lot from others. As students, we can take part in some interesting activities, such as looking after animals and working for sports matches. Also, we can join charity organizations to help protect the environment and so on. It’s OK to have problems, because volunteering takes much time and energy. Sometimes I can’t balance my study and work. If your parents don’t allow you to volunteer, you should have a good talk with them. Try to let them understand you.

I hope you love volunteering and do well in it. Looking forward to your good news. Best wishes David 【解析】

这是一篇给材料作文，给好友Li Ming回信，介绍暑假做志愿者的情况。。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：I'm glad……，we can……，It’s OK to……，If your parents don’t allow you to…….，you should……，I hope……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。 点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头为你想要成为一名志愿者而感到高兴，接下来介绍我们可以从事的志愿者工作以及志愿者工作带来的一些问题，最后我希望你喜欢志愿者工作。此处would like to, enjoy doing sth, learn from, take part in, such as, look after, allow sb to do sth, let sb do sth, look forward to 等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。

2． 写作

假定你是李华，在一位名叫Tiger Mom的学生家长的博客上，你看到以下内容。 请你根据博客内容，写作要点和要求，给这位家长回复。

I’m the mother of a fourteen-year –old . I have a rule for my daughter :be among the top of 5 students or get punished in one way or another . She has been doing very well in school ,but some of my friends keep telling me that I put too much pressure on her .Am I wrong ? 写作要点：1. 表明自己的看法。 2. 陈述自己的理由。 3. 提出至少2条建议。 【答案】Hi,TigerMom,

What puzzles you is actually a puzzle for many parents in China.My idea is that it is not quite right for you to do so.

Although high grades are an important factor in evaluating students and for their future university

admission,development in wisdom,emotion,health,and life attitude should never be ignored. There are

many examples around us. Some all-A students in school have turned out not to be as successful

in

society as they were expected. The reason is often that the pressure from their parents allows them almost no time for other activities. Furthermore,punishment is by no means a wise choice to help them grow up mentally and physically.

So I suggest that you take your friends' advice. More importantly,let her live like a lovely girl；let her

have more friends and social activities；and let her make mistakes of her own as the teenagers often do. 【解析】

这是一篇给材料作文，对学生家长的博客进行回复。结合所给材料，可知本文主要考查一般现在时态，人称为第一，三人称，注意主谓一致问题，句子结构主要为系表结构和动宾结构，注意一些常见句式的应用，比如：My idea is that……，There are……，Some all-A students in school have…….，The reason is……，So I suggest that……等句式的应用。写作中注意运用代词，注意多种句式交替运用。写作中注意叙述顺序，符合逻辑关系。

点睛：本文结构紧凑，语言简练。开头表明自己的看法，接下来陈述自己的理由，最后介绍自己的建议。此处turn out , by no means, help sb do sth, grow up, let sb do sth, make mistakes, of one’s own等这些词组的运用也让文章增色不少。

3．书面表达

根据下列表格的提示，写一篇题为Changes in Our Hometown的英语短文．（80词左右）文章内容必须包含所给的所有信息．开头已给出，不计入总词数． 内容要点： 过去 1旧房 2河水肮脏 3步行、骑自行车上班 4道路狭窄（narrow）． 5居住条件（living conditions）差 现在 1高楼 2河水清澈（clean and clear）． 3乘公交车、小汽车上班 4街道宽阔（wide），干净整洁 5生活越来越好，环境（environment）越来越舒适． 6你的感想…（写两到三句） Changes in Our Hometown

In the past ten years，great changes have taken place in our hometown．

【答案】Changes in Our Hometown

In the past ten years, great changes have taken place in our hometown. In the past, there used to

be old houses. The river was very dirty. The roads were narrow and the living conditions were terrible. People were not rich. They went to work on foot or by bike. But now, there are many tall buildings in our hometown. We can see the clean river and the clear water . Even we can see fish in the water. There are many wide and clean roads. Our life is better and better The environment around us is more and more comfortable. People usually go to work by bus or by car.

I am glad to see these great changes in my hometown. But I think it’s still important to remember the past. It tells that we should cherish the present life. 【解析】 【详解】

亮点说明：这篇习作的层次清晰，内容饱满，表达流畅。文中使用了非常好的短语，例如take place，in our hometown，in the past，used to be，go to do，on foot，by bike，better and better，more and more等。而I think it's still important to remember the past/It tells that we should cherish the present life.等宾语从句结构的运用，丰富了习作内容，使表达多样，是本文的最大亮点。 【点睛】

书面表达题既不是汉译英，也不是可任意发挥的作文。它要求将所规定的材料内容经整理后展开思维，考查运用所学英语知识准确表达意思的能力。所以，考生不能遗漏要点，要尽量使用自己熟悉的单词、短语和句式，尽可能使用高级词汇和较复杂的句式结构以便得到较高的分数。

4．书面表达

假如你是李明，你的英国笔友Jack来信询问你的家乡是否有雾霾天气，情况如何。请你按照以下提示给他回一封e-mail。 内容如下：

1. 由于大气污染程度十分严重，去年已发生数次雾霾天气； 2. 人们已经意识到雾霾天气的危害，正在采取各种措施减少其发生； 3. 你在日常生活中打算为此做些什么。 参考词汇：雾霾haze 注意：

1. 文中不得出现真实姓名和学校名称； 2. 语言通顺，句子连贯，条理清楚，书写规范；

3. 词数80左右，信件的开头与结尾已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear Jack,

I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.

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______________________________________________________________________________ Yours, Li Ming

【答案】Dear Jack,

I’m glad to receive your letter, and thank you for your caring for the weather and my health. Now I’d like to tell you something about the haze.

The hazy weather has occurred a lot of times in my hometown since last year. It was bad for our daily life. More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze. A great number of people have to stay at home .

People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway.

As for me, I will go to school by bike or on foot. In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment. Would you like to tell me some good ideas? I’m looking forward to your reply. Yours, Li Ming 【解析】 【详解】

这篇作文要求我们以李明的身份给自己的英国笔友写信，告诉他关于家乡雾霾的情况。题目中列出了三个要点，我们应根据这些要点提示，来组织语言，充实内容。首先介绍去年家乡的雾霾情况严重；然后介绍为减少雾霾人们采取了一些措施；最后介绍一下你自己在日常生活中应该怎么做。因此文章应主要分成三段，一个内容一段。文章内容中叙述的情况不一，时态不能统一，根据表达的需要使用正确的时态，注意谓语动词的正确形式。写作时，应注意英语句式表达习惯和汉语是不同的，不能逐词翻译，应从句子的整体考虑，写完整的句子，利用简单句的基本句型，使用恰当的词汇和短语。为提升文章档次，可以穿插使用并列句和复合句；语句之间使用恰当的连接成分，使文意连贯，表达流畅。 【点睛】

这是一篇优秀的作文，短文中作者根据题目要求介绍了自己家乡治理雾霾的情况，并结合自身的实际情况，讲述了自己日常生活中是如何做的。首先短文内容完整，包含了题目中要求的所有信息，没有遗漏要点；且文章结构清晰，分成了三段，每一段的中心明确，意思表达清楚、明了。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，作者根据表达需要使用了一般过去时、一般将来时态和一般将来时态，动词形式变化准确，语法规范。短文中语言得体，句式表达符合英语的习惯。句子结构以简单句为主，也使用了一些并列句和复合句，长短句结合，使文章富有节奏。短文中较好的句式有More and more people have to go to see the doctor due to the serious diseases caused by the haze、People all over the country are taking measures to reduce the hazy weather now. 、The government suggests that people go to work or school by public transport, such as the bus and the subway、In addition, I will tell the people I meet to protect the environment.等。

5．书面表达