新托福写作备考：两种写作模式写作结构比较分析

新托福写作备考：两种写作模式写作结构比较分析

朗阁托福考试研究中心

新托福考试写作部分的第一个任务是“Integrated Task”即综合写作，大部分学生对于如何应对综合写作缺乏相关的知识和经验，很大程度依赖于教师的指导，其中一个重要的方面就是如何安排文章的结构。虽然说老师的知道是一方面，但是最重要的还是学生本身的认知，对此，朗阁托福考试研究中心的老师经过一段时间的教学，总结出两种适合新托福综合写作的结构安排，为了形象理解，称为“点对点”型和“面对面”型的结构，本文就将对这两种结构进行分析和比较。

一， “点对点”的结构

“点对点”的结构指的是把综合写作中的阅读材料和听力材料的每一个对应点都单独提炼出来用一个段落加以阐述。这种结构的优点是可以把阅读文章和听力材料的对应关系更细致地进行说明，使文章层次感强，同时反映出考生提炼信息和对比信息的能力更高。比如下面的一篇范文就是ETS给出的满分作文，是一篇典型的“点对点”型的结构安排方式。

Introduction- Relationship The lecturer talks about research conducted by a firm that used the group to handle their work. He says that the theory stated in between reading the passage was very different and somewhat inaccurate when and lecture First Point of Contrast compared to what happened in reality. First, some members got free rides. That is, some didn’t work hard but got recognition for the success nonetheless. This also indicates that people who hard were not given recognition they should have gotten. In other words, weren’t given the opportunity to “shine”. This directly contradicts what the passage indicates. Second Point of Second, groups were slow in progress. The passage says that groups are more responsive than individuals because of the

Contrast number of people involved and aggregated resources. However, the speaker talks about how the firm found that groups were slower than individuals in decision making. Groups needed time for meetings, which are necessary procedures in decision making. This is another place where experience contradicted theory. Third Point of Contrast Third, influential people might emerge and lead the group towards glory If the influent people are going in the right direction there would be no problem. But in cases where they go in the wrong direction, there is nobody that has influence to counter the decision made. In other words, the group might turn dictatorship, with the influential party as the leader, and might become less in its thinking. They might become one-sided, and thus fail to succeed.

二， “面对面”的结构

“点对点”的结构指是最理想的结构安排模式，但有时候考生并不能准确地寻找到阅读和听力材料之间的对应点。这有可能是因为阅读和听力材料之间的对应点本身就不是很明显，或者由于考生自身的能力问题，没有完全听懂或看懂，则要写成“点对点”的结构安排模式，难度会比较大。遇到这种情况，朗阁托福考试研究中心则建议考生可以尝试使用“面对面”的结构安排模式。它与“点对点”的结构安排模式的区别在于，“面对面”作文的结构并不是逐条阐述对应点，而是在总得阐明听力和阅读文章之间的关系后，分别总结听力材料或阅读材料的要点，从“面”上阐述听力和阅读材料之间的联系。以下一篇范文也是根据ETS提供的一套模考题所写的范文，由于此题很难“点对点”地分析听力和阅读之间的关系，因此采取了“面对面”的写法。

Introduction- Relationship between reading lecture Points in the lecture and The lecturer talks about the natural process of crystallization and how the speed of cooling can influence such process, which is proved by Bowen’s crystallization experiment explained in the reading passage. Natural crystallization happens when magma, which is extremely hot in its molten form deep in the earth, gradually cools off when it moves towards the surface of the earth. During the cooling process, the energy from heat is lost, and the atoms which compose the magma begin to move more slowly, forming into an orderly pattern, which turns the magma into a solid crystal structure. However, if the cooling process takes place too rapidly, then there is not enough time for the atoms to be arranged into such an orderly pattern. Therefore, crystallization can’t take place. Instead, a brittle, glass-like material will form. Points in the Reading Norman Bowen’s experiment in the 1920s proved this theory. By collecting and melting elements in rocks, Norman created artificial magma in his laboratory. He first cooled the magma slowly, as in the natural crystallization process, and got mineral crystals. But then he suddenly replaced this normal cooling with rapid freezing, and found frozen glass materials surrounding the solid crystal structure.

可以看出，“点对点”和“面对面”的结构有各自的特点，但总得来说“点对点”的结构在“对比型”的新托福综合写作中要更适用一些，因为它能把矛盾点逐一呈现，更细致地体现了听力和阅读材料之间的关系。但掌握“面对面”的结构也很有必要，因为它可以适用一些听力和阅读材料之间的关系是一致、延伸或解释型的考题。此外，在考生无法寻找到所有的对应点

时，用“面对面”的结构也算是一种补救措施。

附：新托福综合写作sample answer两篇，针对的是同一个考题，第一篇用的是“点对点”结构，第二篇用的是“面对面”的结构。

Sample Answer

New urbanism has emerged to solve the problem of urban sprawl. Regions have to create transportation systems and environmental protection; Cities need to offer housing and jobs that are close together; Neighborhoods should have single- and multi-family housing where residence can walk to stores, public transportation and parks.

Take the community of Celebration for example. It meets the goal of social and civic interaction by setting up a central market street district and housing including single- and multi-family residences. It also meets the goal of environment preservation with its good environmentally-friendly town design, and with high-rise offices and apartment buildings which help reduce the population density.

New urbanism like celebration will bring new changes to urban sprawl.

通过上面的分析，相信学生们对于ETS并没有给出详细的官方建议，只是在ETS公开的综合写作评分标准中，给出了5分（即满分）作文的定义如下：

A response at this level successfully selects the important information from the lecture and coherently and accurately presents this information in relation to the relevant information presented in the reading. The response is well organized, and occasional language errors that are present do not result in inaccurate or imprecise presentation of content or connections.

可以看出，ETS并没有规定一篇综合写作应该使用某种固定的结构模式，而只是从信