一、试题详解 1．核心内容
短文的主要内容为：一位刚工作的年轻新教师在课堂上无视和放任孩子们的违纪现象。有一天，素以严格、做事雷厉风行闻名的校长在听课时发现了课堂无序和老师的不作为，愤然离开教室。
2．写作思路 (1)明确故事人物。
该事件的主要人物是学校校长、新教师(作者)以及他的学生。 (2)理清故事主要事件。
新教师虽抱有满腔热情投入教学，却不知如何正确处理学生在课堂上的违纪行为；行事严格的学校校长在听课时发现了老师的不作为并愤然离开。
(3)根据已知人物、事件，以及续写段落的开头语预测事件的发展。
该事件的总体发展趋势可能是下课后新教师战战兢兢地走进校长办公室准备接受校长的严厉批评，并做好了可能随时被炒鱿鱼的心理准备。结果出人意料，校长语重心长地和教师分析了问题，并给出了良好的建议。深受影响的新教师反思自我，逐渐成长为一名优秀的教育工作者。续写第一段：下课之后，新教师走进校长办公室，等待校长的批评，但出乎意料的是校长并没有严厉责备新老师，而是耐心地分析问题，并提供了一些可行的建议。新教师深受鼓舞，下定决心好好干。续写第二段：15年过后该教师仍然在那所学校教学，还和校长经常坐在一起谈论学生的问题。在校长的影响下，教师明白了教育的真谛，并成长为一名成功的教育工作者。
(4)结合下划线词语罗列写作要点。
结合下划线词语和短文内容，通过提问的方式丰富故事情节。第一段中根据开头语，提出以下问题来丰富故事：
What did the boss say?
How did the new teacher respond to the boss? What would the boss do? Was the teacher fired?
If the teacher was not fired, what would he do with the students? 第二段可以通过下列问题来获取写作要点：
Did the teacher still ignore the bad behavior of his students? What’s the relationship between the boss and the teacher? Did he enjoy his work?
What kind of teacher would he become? 二、参考范文 Paragraph 1：
After class, I took a deep breath and walked into his office.I said nothing, just thinking that I would be fired.To my great surprise, my boss didn’t glare at me with burning eyes. Instead, he patiently named my problems that as a teacher I shouldn’t have ignored the bad behavior of my students. We discussed how I could 11
deal with the situation I met. Finally, I was encouraged and full of confidence when leaving the office. Paragraph 2：
Fifteen years later, I still drive that winding road to the same school.My boss and I always sit together, talking about the new students and their problems. In fact, he becomes my teacher by teaching me the truth of education — “The secret to education lies in respecting the pupil.” Thanks to the help I received from him that first year, I have grown as a successful educator as he is now. 三、范文解析
范文根据所提示的内容进行了合情合理的续写。该文章对学生以后的职业生涯有着良好的引导和启示作用，告诉我们要正视职业中所遇到的问题，并积极面对和解决问题。此外，对自己的职业要有正确的认识和定位，通过了解职业价值观来明确自己的努力方向，以实现自己真正的价值。因此，在第一段中，续写重点为新教师在校长的指导下明白自己的问题所在，并下定决心做出改变。第二段的重点落在在长期的教育教学工作中和校长的影响下，教师悟出了教育的真谛，成为一名出色的教育工作者。
四、提炼归纳
1．保持与原文的同一性
所谓“同一”就是主题的同一、人物的同一和线索的同一。主题的同一就是在续写时紧扣所给的开头语和短文的中心思想，不得脱离原主题，并对原主题进行深化和升华。例如本篇文章的主题就是教师通过在教育过程中遇到的问题来明确自己职业的努力方向，成长为一名优秀的教育工作者。人物的同一即不随意添加新人物，在已给人物的基础上，遵循人物特点发展的规律性。本篇文章的主要人物新教师，是在层层选拔、竞争激烈的情况下获得的教师这份工作，自身对这份职业充满了理想主义的热情。以人物的性格来续写，该教师即使遇到问题，也会坚持不懈。线索的同一就是要遵循原文明示或暗示的线索，充分发挥自己的主观想象，发展故事，完成符合逻辑的推理和续写。续写的第二段的开头是“15年后教师还在这所学校任教”，根据这样的暗示，可以推理出外表看似严格苛刻的校长在事后给了教师必要的职业指导，并帮助他逐渐成长为优秀的教育工作者。
2．保证整篇文章的完整性
所续写的部分与已给部分结合在一起，必须是一篇完整的文章。因此要注意衔接自然，根据原文交代的情节通过想象来发展故事，预测结果。因为人物是记叙文的主体，所以续写的故事情节可以围绕人物的语言、心理、活动、表情等加以丰富，也可以用提问题的形式来扩充内容。最后根据文章逻辑合理推理出故事的结局，或给出一个启示性的总结或评论，这样更能起到深化和升华主题的作用。
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读后续写专练(二)
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(2018·宁波市高三模拟)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 We have all heard the expression：“Remember to stop and smell the roses.” But, how often do we really take time out of our busy fast-paced lives to notice the world around us? I have reflected back on one situation many times since it happened and have learned several powerful lessons from it.
I am as guilty as anyone of ignoring the world around in this manner, especially when I am driving on California’s overcrowded streets. A short time ago, however, I witnessed an event that showed me how being wrapped up in my own little world has kept me from being fully aware of the bigger world picture around me.
I was driving to a business appointment and, as usual, I was planning in my mind what I was going to say. I came to a very busy crossroads where the stoplight had just turned red. “All right，” I thought to myself, “I can beat the next light if I race ahead of the pack.” My mind and car were in autopilot, ready to go when suddenly my absent-minded state was broken by an unforgettable sight.
A young couple, both blind, was walking arm-in-arm across this busy crossroads with cars whizzing by in every direction. The man was holding the hand of a little boy, while the woman was holding something tightly in her hands that sling to her chest, obviously carrying a child. Each of them had a white walking stick extended, searching for clues to navigate them across the crossroads. Initially I was moved. They were overcoming what I felt was one of the most feared handicaps — blindness. “Wouldn’t it be terrible to be blind？” I thought. Without realizing the danger they were in, they were walking right the path of oncoming cars. I was frightened for them because I didn’t know if the other drivers understood what was happening.
However, as I watched from the front line of traffic, I saw a miracle unfold before my eyes. 注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1：
Every car in every direction did the same thing.
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Paragraph 2：
Never noticing something different, the couple adjusted their route as they followed the coaching.
一、试题详解 1．核心内容
短文主要内容为：“我”是一个一直忙于工作的人，开车经过一个十分繁忙的十字路口时，停在路口等红绿灯。此时人行道上有一对年轻的盲人夫妇带着两个小孩，仅靠手中的手杖要走到马路对面。“我”本以为大家会冲他们鸣喇叭，大声喊叫，结果所有车辆同时安静地停下为他们让路。通过此事“我”意识到，忙碌生活中有时也要停下脚步，细心观察身边，可能会发现之前被忽略的美景。
2．写作思路 (1)明确故事人物。
故事中主要人物为作者和年轻的盲人夫妇及当时在场的其他司机。 (2)理清故事主要事件。
“我”开车路过一个十字路口；年轻的盲人夫妇要过马路，当时情况很危险；最后所有司机都发现了，安静地为他们让路。
(3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落的开头语预测故事发展。
故事总体的发展趋势可能是在盲人夫妇过马路时各个方向的车同时停下了，就像时间静止一样。“我”本以为只有自己注意到他们是盲人，结果当“我”环顾时发现每个人都注意到了。大家都没有生气，没有出声。而这对夫妇并没有发现有什么异常，他们调整步伐，继续用他们的手杖指引，成功地走到了马路对面。“我”发现他们竟然一直都是手牵手，停在路边的其他司机也都松了一口气。
(4)结合下划线词语罗列写作要点。
结合下划线词语和短文内容，展开尽可能丰富地想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段“stop and smell the roses”的写作要点可以通过提出以下问题来获取：Did the writer find something good when he stopped？It must be an impressive scene that he never notices.第二、三段的写作要点“when, where”分别是“waiting for the stoplight, at a busy crossroads”。第四段告诉我们故事的主要人物是“the young couple”，还有在场的“other drivers”。根据这些要素我们可以知道，按常理对于闯红灯的人一般司机都会鸣喇叭大声喊叫，会很生气。我们可以提出以下问题，如：
Did the other drivers find they are blind? Will they shout to them?
What are their responses if they find that? Did the couple make it eventually?
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Did the couple notice what’s happening?
短文最后一句中“I saw a miracle unfold before my eyes”有非常重要的作用，通过这句话我们可以知道事情并不是我们所想的那样，应该是出乎意料的。
二、参考范文 Paragraph 1：
Every car in every direction did the same thing.They stopped at the same time. Everything seemed to freeze. Amazed, I looked at the cars around me, and noticed that everyone’s attention was fixed on the blind couple while no one got mad and none was shouting and yelling. Paragraph 2：
Never noticing something different, the couple adjusted their route as they followed the coaching. Trusting their white walking stick, they finally made it. As they went across the road, one thing struck me — they were still arm-in-arm. I was surprised at the emotionless expressions on their faces and judged that they had no idea what was really going on around them. Yet I immediately sensed the sighs of relief of all the other drivers at that busy crossroads.So, taking a moment to see what is going on around you right now may award you something wonderful.
三、范文解析
范文围绕文章的内容进行了合情合理的续写。文章内容清晰交代的“when, where, who, why”及文章最后的miracle都告诉我们这个故事并非普通的闯红灯。“我”本以为只有自己注意到，结果发现其他司机都关注到并为盲人夫妇让行。这符合故事发展的逻辑，也符合作者在文章一开始所说的要停下来发现身边的美好事物。最后两句从全文的角度进行概括，突出了故事的主题。
四、提炼归纳 1．合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要通读给定短文材料，把握故事的人物和事件，在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展做出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。为了将预测过程显性化，可以通过设问的方式，将预测重点以问题的方式显示出来，以利于后续写作时的信息整理和语言组织。在该练习中，我们通过一些问题来拓展并整理自己的写作思路，这些问题以故事的主要人物为主体展开，问题之间有一定的逻辑联系，符合故事发展的合理结局。
同时要关注文章所给出的信息。短文第一段虽然不是记叙内容但是可以看出是经过一些事情之后作者的感悟，提示我们要停下来关注生活。短文的最后一句尤为关键，是文章的转折过渡，可帮助我们合理的展开想象。
2．有效运用连接手段
在具体的写作过程中我们要对罗列的要点进行筛选和整合，还要考虑写作要点之间连接手段的有效运用。例如范文中我们用了“as”来说明事件的时间顺序，amazed作状语突出作者的惊讶，yet表示转折，so来做最后的总结。这些词语的使用可以使文章更加紧凑连贯。
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(2018·温州市高三适应性测试)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。 My boyfriend and I had been dating for almost a year and both felt the time was right to join our lives
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