范文利用倒叙手法在第一段中还原了故事发展的全过程。第二段通过路人的提问突出Joseph高尚的道德品质——诚实。他给路人上了一课，也引起了读者的深思。
四、提炼归纳 1．巧妙使用倒叙手段
倒叙是把事件的结局提到文章的开头来叙述。给定文本下划线词lottery ticket是关键信息， 而honest则是全文的核心思想。但是切记倒叙时要交代清楚起点。例如段落开头语“The story turned out to be this”和“This was the scene just now.”就为后文的展开做好了铺垫。
2．灵活运用关键词语
“the subway station, Joseph, fees, flight, 50 dollars, hat, George, unexpected, honest, lottery ticket”是给定的10个标有下划线的关键词语，如何灵活运用这些词，使之与所给段落开头语衔接合理、与故事原文有机融合，必须动一番脑筋。如范文所示，文中用了8个给定词，其实“where he was given the lottery ticket”就是“the subway station”。
3．适当留白
留白，是绘画艺术的一种手法，文学创作中也不乏“留白”，它给读者留下许多想象的空间。换句话说，留白是一种智慧也是一种境界。Joseph的回答可以让考生自由发挥想象力，只要合情合理即可。范文中在“It goes without saying that”引导的主语从句中穿插了虚拟语气，符合“所使用语法结构和词汇丰富、准确”的高要求。最后一段的归纳是对短文核心思想honest精髓的浓缩。
读后续写专练(三)
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(2018·绍兴二模)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
My grandson, Daniel, and I have always been very close. When Daniel’s father remarried after a divorce, Daniel, who was eleven, and his little sister, Kristie, came to live with us. My husband and I were more than happy to have so nice kids in the house again.
It is my grandson, Daniel’s life’s dream to play football. Daniel was co-captain and star defensive tackle (防守阻截队员) of his high school team; he expected to apply for a football scholarship and was looking forward to playing college football. He just loved the sport.
He can be as stubborn as a mule (驴) once he decides on something. Since football meant the most to him, we were sure he was to make it.
Things were going along just fine until the diabetes (糖尿病) I’ve lived with most of my adult life started affecting my eyes, and then more seriously, my kidneys (肾). Then everything seemed to fall apart.
Daniel, seventeen by then, was really affected by the change in me. He tried as hard as he could to make me laugh, to bring back the grandma who loved to clown around (开玩笑) with him.
But things were not improving. After a year, my condition grew worse and the doctors felt that if I didn’t receive a kidney transplant (移植) within six months, I would surely die. No one told Daniel this, but he knew — he said all he had to do was look after me. To top it off, as my condition worsened, there was a chance that I would become too weak to have the transplant surgery at all, and then there would be nothing they could do for 21
me. So we started the tense and desperate wait for a kidney.
I was determined that I didn’t want a kidney from anyone I knew. I would wait until an appropriate kidney became available, or I would literally die waiting.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1：
But Daniel had other plans， Paragraph 2：
The next day they moved me out of special attention department.
一、试题详解 1．核心内容
短文主要内容为：Daniel的父亲再婚后，Daniel一直和祖父母生活在一起，浓厚的亲情带给彼此无限快乐。但祖母(作者)得了糖尿病，病情日渐严重，非常需要肾脏移植。Daniel私下做了检查，匹配成功，为祖母捐了一个肾脏挽救了祖母的性命。
2．写作思路 (1)明确故事人物。
故事中主要人物为Daniel、他的祖母、祖父和医院的医生。 (2)理清故事主要事件。
祖母得了糖尿病，日渐恶化，身体即将衰弱到无法生存，必须进行肾脏移植手术。 (3)根据已知人物、事件及续写段落的开头语预测故事发展。
故事总体的发展应该是Daniel捐出肾脏，成功地挽救了祖母的性命。续写第一段：祖母等待匹配肾脏
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时，Daniel坚持做测试，放弃自己的足球梦想，为救祖母捐出自己的肾脏。续写第二段：移植手术成功，Daniel和祖母沉浸在亲情的甜美和快乐中。
(4)结合下划线词语罗列写作要点。
可以通过提出以下7个问题来获取写作要点： What did Daniel do to make sure his kidney was perfect? How did Daniel persuade his grandma to accept his organ? How was the surgery?
After the surgery, how did grandma recover? How did Daniel feel? What would Daniel say?
Was it worthwhile to transplant the kidney? 二、参考范文 Paragraph 1：
But Daniel had other plans, intending to donate one of his own kidneys to his dear grandma. Although he knew I wasn’t at all happy with his offer, he insisted that he couldn’t stand it if I were not around. His face wore an expression of appeal mixed with determination. His reason was that compared to my life, football means nothing to him. Surprisingly the tests showed Daniel was an appropriate and perfect kidney match. Both surgeries went smoothly. Paragraph 2：
The next day they moved me out of special attention department. I was pushed to the floor where Daniel was recovering health. When we saw each other, we did not know what to say. Holding hands, we just sat there and looked at each other for a long time, overwhelmed by the deep feeling of love that connected us. Finally, he spoke, “It is worthwhile, grandma. I’ve got my grandma back.”
三、范文解析
范文围绕短文的内容进行了合情合理的续写。肾脏移植是世界上比较成熟并且发展稳定的医学技术，匹配的肾脏捐赠是救命关键。因此，第一段写了Daniel做了测试后得知自己是合适的捐赠人，同时说服祖母接受移植手术，这样手术得以顺利进行。第二段，由于Daniel的爱心，手术及时进行后，祖母得以康复，获得重生，符合故事逻辑。最后两句突出该手术的意义，点明文章的主题——爱让人重生。
四、提炼归纳 1．合理拓展情节
读后续写首先要通读给定短文材料，把握故事的人物和事件：Daniel与祖母感情深厚，祖母生命垂危急需进行肾脏移植手术，却不愿接受亲人的器官。在此基础上根据提示对故事的发展作出合情合理又合乎逻辑的预测。范文根据7个问题拓展和整理行文思路，这7个问题以Daniel为主体，交代了他会做什么、会怎么做、为什么要这样做、行动的结果如何、他的感觉怎样以及他会怎么说。
2．有效运用连接手段
范文以时间为明线索推动整个故事发展，如“the next day, when, finally”的选用。同时为丰富故事情节，用but引出Daniel独到的思想和决心；用although突出祖孙都为对方考虑，最后孙子说服奶奶；用surprisingly
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引出检测结果。
3．使用多种句式结构
范文用“intending to ..., an expression ..., mixed with determination ..., His reason was that ...”等语言来表达故事的内容。
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(2018·浙江五校联考)阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
Tringg-Tringggggg! Anna rolled in bed hoping the ringing would stop. When she eventually answered, her maid was calling to inform she wouldn’t come as usual, as rains had flooded her house. Unhappy, Anna slid back under the quilt, wishing she also could stay in.
Having moved to the city few months back, Anna lived alone and worked in an advertising firm. Assisting her colleague Mary on a presentation for a rich customer Mr. John, Anna worked rather hard. However, the fact that she wasn’t part of the team handling the deal was highly disheartening. Reaching for the bedside clock, she woke up hurriedly. 8：00 a．m. — the red figure glared back. Damn! Late AGAIN! Taking a quick shower, she rushed to the bus-stop.
She had barely stepped out when downpour caught her in the middle. Blaming the rains, she made her way through the crowd when she spotted her bus leaving. She ran after it but lost her balance and her purse contents spilled out. Frustratingly looking up towards heaven, Anna sighed. Stuffing her purse, she decided to take a taxi. Attempting to hail an empty taxi for 20 minutes, Anna paced restlessly, when someone pulled at her. A young beggar girl was vying for attention. Anna shrugged her off, assuming the girl wanted money. However, the girl held out her hand holding Anna’s mobile, which Anna left behind when she dropped her bag. Embarrassed at her insensitivity, Anna offered her chocolate for appreciation, which the girl grabbed quickly. The prize lighting up her face, she joined her companions, playing in the rains with joy. Anna’s heart soared seeing the poor children treasure the little things.
Half-hour later, Anna stepped into her office which to no surprise wore a deserted look. Before she could reach her desk, Chris was walking towards her. “Meeting with John now! Mary is not in because of water logging in here; we will go ahead，” Chris ordered seriously. Shocked yet excited at the development, Anna followed. Post the meeting, Chris announced that staff should leave instantly as thunderstorms were predicted.
注意：
1．所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2．至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语； 3．续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好； 4．续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。 Paragraph 1：
After an eventful day, Anna reached home, hungry and exhausted.
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Paragraph 2：
Lost in thought, Anna looked back on the events of the day.
一、试题详解 1．核心内容
短文主要内容为：一大早，Anna诸事不顺——女佣因大雨不能来做家务；上班时错过了公交车；追赶公交车时摔了一跤；打的迟迟等不到车。但幸运的是，手机失而复得、工作出现了转机……
2．写作思路
(1)理清人物关系，明确主要事件。
文本中的人物有公司职员Anna、Anna的女佣、Anna的同事Mary、上司Chris、大客户Mr. John、捡到她手机的乞丐。其中的故事包括下雨天女佣请假，Anna上班错过了公交车，追赶公交车时摔了一跤，等出租车久候不至，乞丐送回了捡到的手机，上班后因同事请假意外地被委以重任。
(2)梳理事件关系，突显故事逻辑。
故事总体的发展可能是Anna下班后又累又饿，但是因为女佣请假只能拖着疲惫的身躯继续做家务。然而在做家务的过程中，她渐渐地体会到了其中的乐趣。做完家务她开始看电视，意外地看到了她早上错过的公交车出事故的新闻。回想这一天发生的事，Anna体会到了“塞翁失马，焉知非福”的道理。续写第一段：Anna刚回家时心不甘情不愿地做饭烧菜打扫卫生。然而，她一边干家务一边渐渐感受到了做家务时的宁静和愉悦，上班带来的身心疲惫也得到了缓解。带着这样的心情，她开始看电视，却吃惊地看到原本她要坐的公交车发生了车祸。续写第二段：Anna回想这一天所有的事情，才发现有时候坏运气也会带来好的结果。如果女仆不请假，她不会体验到做家务带来的简单快乐；如果她赶上了公交车，就会遭遇车祸；如果她及时打到了出租车，她的手机就丢了；如果不是因为下大雨同事Mary没来上班，她就无法得到上司的重用。可见，塞翁失马，焉知非福。
(3)结合文本特征，选择陈述方法。
结合标有下划线的关键词语和短文内容，展开尽可能丰富的想象，罗列出尽可能多的故事发展情节。例如，第一段可以通过提出以下问题来获取写作要点：
What did Anna do at home? How did she feel at first?
Did something unexpected happen to her again?
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