work. Beside, it is becoming more and more important in our daily life. If you study hardly, you will succeed. Do remember that where there is a will there is a way. I'm looking forward to hearing a good news from you!
Yours， Li Hua
答案：第二句：worried前加be或worried→worry 第四句：in→to; learn→learning 第五句：because→that; lose→lost 第七句：第一个and→but; be后加an 第八句：Beside→Besides 第九句：hardly→hard 第十一句：去掉a
此类作文往往就某事提出自己的建议或解决办法。有可能是写给个人，就其遇到的某个问题提出自己的看法和观点，也可能是写给某个组织或机构，就其问题或某些社会现象等提出建议及解决措施。
一、基本结构
正文一般采用“三段式结构”。
首段：针对对方对自己的信任简单表示感谢，或直接陈述事由，表明写作意图。 主体段：首先肯定对方的优点，然后再委婉分析存在的问题，并提出解决的建议。表达时应语言得体。
尾段：强调解决问题的根本办法或提出倡议。 二、增分佳句
1．To get rid of smoking, I suggest you eat some sugars and fruits to remove your attention.
为了戒烟，我建议你吃一点糖果来转移你的注意力。
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2．It's very important for you to have a strong determination of quitting smoking. 有一个坚强的决心对你戒烟很重要。
3．You should develop positive attitudes towards life and take an active part in communicating with others.
你要有积极的生活态度，多同他人交流。
4．You should stop buying unnecessary because no wasting is saving. 你应当不要买不必要的东西，因为不浪费就是节省。
5．Faced with the problem, I think your mother and I must work together to help you.
面对这个问题，我认为你妈妈和我必须联合起来帮助你。
6．Something should be done to help you to achieve your aims. 应当做点事情来帮助实现你的目标。
[题目要求]
你儿子的班主任打电话告诉你你的儿子被发现私下里学抽烟，作为父亲或母亲你写了一封信放在儿子的枕头上，在信里你告诉他抽烟的害处，并告诫他杜绝抽烟。
提示：1.健康角度； 2．经济角度； 3．戒烟决心；
4．词数100左右，开头部分已给出，不计入总词数。 Dear son，
You know what a surprise to me when I learn you are smoking these days. Actually, I understand you are sometimes feeling stressed during the tiring and heavy study. However, it is foolish to reduce your pressure by smoking. As to smoking, here is what I want to say to you.
________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ ________________________________________________________________________ 第一步：审题构思很关键 一、审题
1．确定体裁：本文为问题解决类作文。
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2．确定人称：本文人称应以第二人称为主。 3．确定时态：本文时态应用一般现在时。 二、构思
第一部分：得知儿子抽烟很吃惊，表露担忧。尽管儿子做了错事，但作者理解。 第二部分：从健康和经济角度分析吸烟的危害，让儿子认识到其严重性。 第三部分：表达愿望，相信儿子定能戒烟。 第二步：核心词汇想周全
1．be_harmful_to/do_great_harm_to 危害 2．meanwhile/at_the_same_time/in_the_meantime
3．the_most_serious_illness 4．lung_cancer 5．a_waste_of_money 6．a_pack_of_cigarettes 7．cause/lead_to/result_in
同时 最严重的疾病 肺癌 浪费钱 一包烟 导致；造成
8．make_up_one's_mind_to_do/be_determined_to_do
下定决心做
9．get_rid_of_the_bad_habit/give_up_the_bad_habit
第三步：由词扩句雏形现
1．众所周知，吸烟有害我们的健康。(as引导的非限定性定语从句) As_we_all_know,_smoking_is_harmful_to_our_health.
2．它对中学生的危害更大，因为它对他们的身心都造成危害。(for引导的原因状语从句)
It's_even_more_harmful_to_middle_school_students_for_it_does_great_harm_to_their_health_as_well_as_to_their_mind.
3．由吸烟导致的最严重的疾病就是肺癌。(定语从句)
The_most_serious_illness_that_was_caused_by_smoking_is_lung_cancer. 4．同时，吸烟也浪费钱。
Meanwhile,_smoking_is_also_a_waste_of_money.
5．例如，如果你每天抽一包烟15元，那么一年大约是5 400元。(for example; if条件状语从句)
For example, if you spend 15 yuan on a pack of cigarettes every day, then in a year that is about 5,400 yuan.
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改掉坏习惯
6．为了保持健康，你应该下决心戒掉抽烟的坏习惯。(不定式作状语)
To_keep_healthy,_you_should_make_your_mind_to_get_rid_of_the_bad_habit_of_smoking.
第四步：句式升级造亮点 1．用it作形式主语改写句1
It_is_known_to_all_that_smoking_is_harmful_to_our_health. 2．用not only ... but also ...结构改写句2
It's_even_more_harmful_to_middle_school_students_for_it_does_great_harm_not_only_to_your_health_but_also_to_your_mind.
3．用过去分词短语作定语改写句3
The_most_serious_illness_caused_by_smoking_is_lung_cancer. 第五步：过渡衔接联成篇 Dear son，
You know what a surprise to me when I learn that you are smoking these days. Actually, I understand you are sometimes feeling stressed during the tiring and heavy study. However, it is foolish to reduce your pressure by smoking. As to smoking, here is what I want to say to you.
It_is_known_to_all_that_smoking_is_harmful_to_our_health._And_it's_even_more_harmful_to_middle_school_students_for_it_does_great_harm_not_only_to_your_health_but_also_to_your_mind._Smoking_causes_many_illnesses._A_lot_of_people_always_cough_because_of_smoking._The_most_serious_illness_caused_by_smoking_is_lung_cancer.
Meanwhile,_smoking_is_also_a_waste_of_money._For_example,_if_you_spend_15_yuan_on_a_pack_of_cigarettes_every_day,_then_in_a_year_that_is_about_5,400_yuan.
_It_will_be_more_meaningful_if_the_money_can_be_used_in_a_good_way.__Besides,_careless_smokers_may_cause_dangerous_fires.
Thus,_to_keep_healthy,_you_should_make_your_mind_to_get_rid_of_the_bad_habit_of_smoking._Please_stop_smoking_at_once.
I_love_you_and_believe_you!
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